I have to say that I enjoyed most of chapter 1. I'm not sure if I will read much more - NaNo starts tomorrow so I may lose the story between now and then. I would like to add that you may need to get a beta/spell checker. I was into the story and then there were more and more misspelled words. I hate it because that always pulls me out of a story and this one seems as if it is going to be extremely interesting. One of them is felling for feeling. I saw it multiple times. There are quite a few and some of them are ones that spellchecker would not find like "paste the 'test'." It should be past, not paste like in glue. Please take this as it is meant, constructively. I hate seeing a beautiful story that has small things like this.
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cyn_ful on Chapter 1 Thu 31 Oct 2013 07:01PM UTC
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