This was so, so interesting and I truly can’t wait to read more. I love the way you situate us in Jackie’s head, the precision of detail and the vagueness of memory provides both intrigue and authenticity. Your voices are spot-on, both in the internal monologue and the dialogue.
I have a hard time picking what I think my favorite choice of yours is: Jackie’s college sex life (I love her slow, plodding realization that her relationship to heterosexual sex is apathetic if not antipathetic) or the way you’ve described Jackie’s parents. It’s a common interpretation—one I’ve personally employed—that Jackie’s mom oscillates between neglect and outright cruelty, verbally and emotionally abusive. I think that’s a justifiable extrapolation from her single appearance in Saints. But I think it’s much more fascinating and rich and textured as you’ve described her, certainly not all one thing or all another but suffocating and oppressive in an almost soft and affectionate way, like a vise padded with velvet.
I’m eager to read more, thank you for sharing this!
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woodenpicador on Chapter 1 Wed 13 Dec 2023 01:25AM UTC
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