Before reading, know that this is NOT a personal attack against you😓, and I don't think your writing is bad, it has nothing to do with that!!! (after I finished writing everything I thought this warning was necessary, man, it's not hate, it's not a character, after all I loved reading this fanfic💕)
Being honest, I like Leah, I just think she's a little controversial 😓 but I understand this as being young and lacking maturity, like (I use Google Translate on Chrome, since I'm from Brazil and speak Portuguese, and we know that the translation her automaticity is not 100%, maybe that's why) example (not that this is the case): I think she judges others very quickly and then complains about those who do that It's in that sense A bit hypocritical, I don't know (it's not exactly about that ❗️, but I think you understand the vibe)
This has nothing to do with Leah, but I get really irritated by Elizabeth always looking like Ciel's bride when the real bride is Leah 😓😣 like, when it comes to dancing the waltz, it's always Lizzy and Ciel first, in all things possible, I feel like I understand why Leah thought Ciel liked Lizzy more, because in most cases Leah seems like "the another woman" and never the main one😭
There's nothing to it, but I really want to see Leah finally revealing that she knows that Sebastian is a demon, etc., I think that probably won't happen, but it would be interesting if she came to Ciel and said: I think Sebastian is a demon 🫢😜💥 , or for her to discover the contract that the ciel has 😨🤭(in parts she has already seen certain things, like a little of the eye, but she is not sure, and the brand too)
OH CALM DOWN I REMEMBERED ANOTHER TOPIC WHILE WRITING THIS I know Leah is bad at caring about things or comforting, but it was really stupid that she didn't even care about Sebastian's death when Ciel was "freaking out" (we know it was fake ) when you found out about Sebastian's death, like girl, your fiancé is in despair because the thing he cared about most died, at least ask if he's ok 😓
i get it what you mean. i appreciate you even taking the time to write a comment this long and thought out! i’ll answer your paragraphs individually❤️ (being a portuguese speaker is so cool by the way! i used to try and learn it. i didn’t get very far though before i forgot about it and never picked it back up again😭)
controversial is certainly a way to describe leah and i definitely can see where you get leah being hypocritical from and she’s definitely judgmental. i can’t recall on the top of my head how much has been showcased in the fic so far, but a lot of it has to do with leah’s environment and how she grew up. being a child was never something she got to do often as well, so i feel that’s where her sort of lack of maturity comes from. in a few chapters from now there is a backstory chapter for leah that actually explains some of her character and can shed some light to why she acts the way she does.
elizabeth seeming like she comes first is also something that sort of annoys me, which probably sounds surprising since i’m the one writing it. half of my reasonings for things tend to feel subconscious, but i feel that this one is primarily because elizabeth is a lot more open than leah. leah isn’t outwardly affectionate a lot of the time and prefers to keep to herself, unlike elizabeth who is a lot more open and willing to drag ciel around without shame. elizabeth is also a lot more comfortable with ciel, seeing as they’ve known each other a lot longer than ciel and leah have know each other. leah doesn’t have the grace of having seen ciel as a child and how “he” used to be. the only ciel she has known is the him after the cult and trauma that she endured so she sees him being reserved as normal and she doesn’t want to push his boundaries. in turn, leah feels like the odd one out since she won’t take these grand leaps like elizabeth and assumes that ciel must prefer her. leah and ciel’s relationship will grow over time and we’ll get to see their chances to truly bond where leah will feel like the main woman.
(small spoiler, i suppose) at some point, leah does actually plan to confront someone about sebastian being a demon/not human! as of right now, she hasn’t said anything because it’s a big risk. in this time period, people weren’t exactly open to thoughts like that and the idea of demons, at least any like sebastian, could seem a bit ridiculous. just coming out with the question could risk leah being deemed crazy or embarrass herself, neither of which she wants to do. and depending on how far it goes, leah’s father could have her locked up in an institution if he pleased or she thinks ciel could do so after they marry (considering he would have the right to do so because of the little amount of rights women had at this time.) it’s certainly something we’ll see later on!
yea, leah’s lack of comfort can definitely appear stupid at times and i understand why you see it that way. she has a problem with being insensitive, another small thing that manifested out of her upbringing. deep down, i feel she doesn’t want to be that way, but she’s so troubled with handling her own feelings, let alone another person’s, that she falls short and can be useless in times of grieving/needing comfort. to leah, she doesn’t know the full extent of ciel and sebastian’s relationship. she sees sebastian as just another butler and she was never particularly close to him herself, so she doesn’t feel the need to grieve. this ends up extending to how she expects ciel to act and receive the news once he calmed down from slapping sebastian’s “dead” body around.
it’s alright! i love your comment🫶🏻 i’m so giddy and flattered that you’ve payed this much attention to analyze bits of leah’s character. knowing that someone else enjoys her, despite her many faults, is an amazing feeling and i’m beyond glad that you’re enjoying the fic!❤️
Thank you for responding, that was very sweet of you 💕!! I loved the mini-spoiler MUAHAAAHAHAHAAHAHAH😈 (evil laugh)
Portuguese is a really difficult language, it has a lot of grammatical classes and such, I wouldn't want to learn it either if I wasn't native here and already knew it
now I just have to wait for more Ciel interactions and Leah (I love them 😭❤️💐) looking forward to the next chapter!
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